It followed by it in a sentence Автор темы: patyjs
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patyjs 
Мексика
Local time: 15:05
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Hi all,
Does this sentence seem right:
We won't deny it, it was overwhelming for us, too.
The repeated "it" feels clumsy to me but I don't know how to avoid it. Unless I do avoid it and say:
We won't deny; it was overwhelming for us, too.
Am I overthinking?
Thoughts are appreciated...thanks.
| | | | LCVB
Бельгия
Local time: 22:05
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| Rewrite or keep | Sep 4, 2019 |
I don't see anything wrong with the repetition; if you don't like it, why don't you rewrite the sentence:
It could not be denied...
It was undeniable...
| | | | | Make it simpler | Sep 4, 2019 |
What about...
"We won't deny it was overwhelming for us, too."
| | | | Phil Hand
Китай
Local time: 05:05
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| Two sentences? | Sep 4, 2019 |
I think technically, "We won't deny it, it was overwhelming for us, too" is a run-on, so you'd need some kind of sentence-splitting punctuation in there: a full stop, a colon, or a semicolon. (Though in informal texts, I think run-ons like this are fine.)
Other options include inverting the sentence:
It was overwhelming for us, too, we can't deny.
Or using a different phrase for the "can't deny" part:
We have to admit (that) it was rather ove... See more I think technically, "We won't deny it, it was overwhelming for us, too" is a run-on, so you'd need some kind of sentence-splitting punctuation in there: a full stop, a colon, or a semicolon. (Though in informal texts, I think run-ons like this are fine.)
Other options include inverting the sentence:
It was overwhelming for us, too, we can't deny.
Or using a different phrase for the "can't deny" part:
We have to admit (that) it was rather overwhelming for us, too.
We can tell you, it was overwhelming for us, too.
Or turn the adverbial tag into an actual adverb:
It was undeniably overwhelming for us, too. ▲ Collapse
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B D Finch
Франция
Local time: 22:05
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| Register and punctuation | Sep 4, 2019 |
I think that, in an informal register or reported speech, your original sentence is better than the attempts to rewrite it, because it's more immediate and natural. However, as Phil says, it needs better punctuation and I think that should be a semicolon. Each of the two main clauses could each stand as a separate sentence, but it's better run on as a single sentence.
| | | | | Another suggestion | Sep 4, 2019 |
"There's no denying, it was..."
| | | | DZiW (X)
Украина
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| If the it-sayer meant it | Sep 4, 2019 |
Two independent clauses are correct both grammatically and syntactically.
Depending on the original idea, they are two antecedents joined asyndetically [without conjunctions].
| | | | Rachel Fell
Великобритания
Local time: 21:05
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I would write it as:
"We won't deny it, it was overwhelming for us too."
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Мексика
Local time: 15:05
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Автор темы | Thanks everyone | Sep 5, 2019 |
I appreciate all your valuable input. I went with the simplest rendition in the end, suggested by Francisco Vare: We won't deny it was overwhelming for us, too.
Have a great day, everyone!
| | | | neilmac
Испания
Local time: 22:05
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The sentence is fine if you add a semicolon (;) after the first "it"...
"I don't like it; it sticks to my fingers…"
"We won't deny it; it something something yadda yadda...." (Sorry, my short-term memory is shot away these days)
[Edited at 2019-09-05 16:27 GMT]
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